1.WALT give and respond to feedback from our friends(sp,?punc,great w/s)
2.WALT use variety of sentence types simple,compound,complex(Level 4 adverb beginningYayyyyy On a Sunny holiday my Dad said “do you’s want to come to Wellington for the holidays?” I
said yes and my sister said yes to but I didn’t want her to come. Anyways When me my Dad and mysister were in Wellington It was so cool to see all of the statutes it was so amazing.We got to Wellington airport and guess what? there was hardly anyone there but some airport people were. I kept on running around and around and around. Then I nearly got in trouble it was so Funny we waited for probably about one Hour for my Dad’s friend to pick us up. Eventually he turned up we got to our amazing hotel and amazing pool. The next day we got to the Museum and It looked like it was a giant house. When we went in I was so full of joy. First we went and saw some Gallipoli statutes about A.N.Z.A.C Wars. After that we went and seen the sea Mountains exhibition and some sea creatures. Later on that day we went to watch a movie.We went and watched the Despicable Me after that we went to kmart and bought some Clothes. Then we went to the pizza shop and bought yummy pizza’s later we went back to our hotel and we woke up to the next day.Then in the morning We went back to te papa and we went to the cafe there was yummy stuff like blueberry muffins and pies and yummy pizza’s I keeped on running around and hiding away but then I got lost but then I found my sister and my dad said my dad and sister “said don’t run away again” but it was funny anyways it began getting darker and darker and darker I will never forget that day never never never…………..
Hi my name is Abby and I am in Te Waka Ako at Waikowhai Primary school,I like your story about going to Wellington. It made me think of how I went to Wellington for by birthday last year. I think it is cool how you are using a variety of sentences. Have you thought putting your work in order? If you would like to see my learning, my blog is http://wpsabbym.blogspot.co.nz.
ReplyDeleteHey Manaaki-Tia My name is Caitlin and I am a student at waikowhai primary school. I was looking at your writing work and i thought it was cool and fun to read. I really liked how you used your punctuation wisely and put it in the right spots. Your writing reminded me of the writing that I did of when I was Australia. Your writing also reminded me of when I went down to wellington for my aunts wedding. Have you thought about adding some pictures so everyone can see how much fun you had there. If you would like to check out my blog here it is http://wpscaitlinn.blogspot.co.nz/ Blog u later=)
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